This fic was obviously meant to please me: it's an Asuka fic, after all.

But it didn't really satisfied me and I'll tell you why.

You'll probably think, "I bet the characters are all OOC". Actually, no, they're not really OOC. Except for Gendo's outburst, I believe the character's behaviors are quite believable. I think the author even made Asuka act in-character, considering the fic's background.

Speaking of background, this fic is kind of an alternative to End Of Evangelion. The author says there are spoilers, but I don't think I could see any, since he completely changed the way Eva 'ends'. It's not really a problem, to me at least, even if I'm sure other people will find the changes way too disturbing to be believable and enjoyable.

The story takes place in the middle of an Angel attack. The Angel is in fact inside Unit 01, and tries to merge with Shinji... At this point, nothing really hard to believe, mind you. It's when Asuka and Rei come to the rescue that the reader's getting all confused: the lack of scene description (the story is written in script format, but it's not a sufficient reason to put so little description!), and the absence of scene transitions makes the story really hard to read, and the storyline itself is then hard to follow, which is a really really BAD point...

Most of all, and what made me sad about this fic, is the fact that the ending makes absolutely no sense (is this really an ending scene? I'd rather think that the author didn't know how to end his fic, yeah...), and the title doesn't give any hint on what's happening: "Remains of Innocence". Yeah, this would be a good title for a lemon where Asuka and Shinji would get some fun and she would get preg... hmmm, never mind. ^_^ What you're expecting of a fanfic title is that it gives you an "overall" idea of what's going to happen in the fic, but no, no, not with this one...

Overall, too bad this fic had a poor execution. The story was not very interesting, that's true, but at least, characters weren't that OOC. I guess it's a first attempt at writing fanfics from the author, and so, we can't really blame him for this. If you meet this fic, don't read it, you'll waste your time. It's not badly written, it's just that it's really uninteresting.

Until instrumentality is needed again...

SEELE-02
February 16th 2000

If I write a story, it's with a purpose in mind (aside from keeping myself busy and entertained). There's a story to tell.

I felt no purpose in this story. Oh, things happened, but it didn't feel like it was going anywhere. It lacked substance. For the most part, it was a long (boring) dialogue. Even worse, a dialogue written in script. Descriptions are too oversimplified. What could have been an epic battle was summarized in a few single lines:

"Eva-02 tears the nearest eva to her to shreds. It grabs the Lance and uses it as a weapon like Rei did, only with more ferocity. Eva-02 destroys all the evas by different methods, decapitating, ripping apart, etc. until there is only Evangelion unit-05 left. Eva-02 spears it on the Lance of Longinus and then rips it apart with its hands. Then Eva-02 deactivates."

It goes like this all the way. And I think there's actually "a lot" of description here compared to some other places...

I really wonder why I read it from beginning to end. It's not like there was much to read. The author just throws situations in without much explaining anything, and actually starts the story with giving us a list of changes he's implementing in the NGE reality, without explanations. This I call lazy work. So I can't even give the author some commendation for his effort.

This story was just a big waste of my time.

SEELE-01

Until instrumentality is needed again...