| Re: casey james, Apr 02, 2002 10:00 AM Maggie, It sounds like you have a very special realtionship with your nephew. You are lucky to have someone like that in your life. Their is nothing as pure as the innocense of a child. Do you see him changing as he gets older and becomes more aware of the world around him? Do you think your time together outside will help shape his awareness and appreciation on nature? He is adorable by the way! Thanks for sharing. |
| Re: Allison, Apr 02, 2002 10:12 AM maggie, I really enjoyed reading about your newphew. I think that it is wonderful that you can get a different outlook of life through him. I really do not have any suggestions to improve it. There might be a few spots where you could use a different work that would make things clearer. Good job. |
| Re: Britney Lewis, Apr 02, 2002 10:16 AM You are blessed to have someone in your life that brings you so much joy. You will be a great mother some day!! You should consider a profession working with children. Wouldnt it be nice to go back to childhood, where everything new and in nature makes you happy. Things of that sort are so intriguing at that age and young people take so much appreciation for nature. Adults today take the natural environment for granted. Maybe if we could all stay in a toddler stage the world would be a better place. You did a great job and I dont have any advice. |
| Re: Mia Baxter, Apr 02, 2002 10:18 AM Your nephew is so cute! I know how much fun kids are- they are worry free about petty, superficial things, which is a nice change. Good job of showing his fascination with nature. Your story is great. I have no suggestions to give you. |
| Re: LaTrice, Apr 02, 2002 10:19 AM The title is a great phrase to explain your topic and to get the attention of the audience. The way you compared your nepfew to yourself, like the way you look at life, the way you personalize your paper with words you only use, and demonstrated the intimiatacy between ya'll was a plus. You a great job at illustrating the moments. |
| Re: Nisha, Apr 02, 2002 10:29 AM Maggie, I loved reading your essay, and your webpage is really good! Your nephew is adorable!! I can only imagine how much fun you have with him when you get to see him. I think you did a great job describing this in your essay. Maybe if you add a bit more about nature, and something specific about what you and Ramiro do out in nature. Is there anything specific both of you really enjoy doing together outside in nature? Overall, I really enjoyed reading this and seeing pictures of your cute nephew! Great work! |
| Re: katy , Apr 02, 2002 10:35 AM How cute your litle cousin is. Do you spend a lot of time with him? I liked reading your paper, especially the part of the pollie's, although I know then as rollie pollies. The description of how a child is made of rubber is very true. One recommendation the I have is maybe to expand on the wonder and awe that your cousin often experiences in nature for the very first time. |
| Re: Kate Lincoln, Apr 04, 2002 10:12 AM Maggie, what a cutie! You are lucky to have such a cute and wonderful little person to spend time with. I wish that I had someone so young that I could spend time with like that. Your writing was very good as well; you did a good job tying your essay into nature and talking about the importance of nature for you two. If I were to recommend any changes, they would be to tell more stories about the two of you outdoors. Maybe take him on an outing simply for the revision of the project, to the botanical gardens or somewhere that he might enjoy and take pictures and tell stories about that specific outing. That would be an interesting addition to your project. good work! |