Anthony,
I received the documents from you today, and I appreciate the effort that you have spent preparing the letter. I met briefly with Mr. Rod Johnson from our board of directors, and he had a couple of suggestions for revisions that must be made, because the current draft does not quite meet the requirements for endorsement. I have attached a copy of the letter with Mr. Johnson's notes, and provided some notes from our discussion below:
1. In your first paragraph, we will need a company history. You might briefly describe how long that the company has been open, and the types of products that you carry.
2. In the second paragraph, it would be helpful if you named some specific products that you currently carry. As you probably already know, E. Rection is currently the largest distributor of adult novelty products in the U.S., and we carry a variety of personal massagers, lingerie and erotic videos. My secretary is going to send you a product catalog this evening after she has a chance to prepare it for electronic distribution, and that should assist you.
3. In the third paragraph, please expand on the impact that E. Rection's products have had in the community. For example, you could say that a portion of the profits from your store have been used to purchase new equipment for local schools and hospitals, and that you were able to underwrite a new city park. Also, Mr. Johnson indicated some minor spelling and grammatical changes that need to be made.
Other than those few points, I think that it is a really great letter, and you should be granted contractor status very soon, pursuant to your resubmission of the letter with the marked changes, and after we receive an appropriate photograph for your credentials.
Good work, my friend. I hope that you have figured out what you are going to do with all this money that you are about to have.
Hugh
P.S.: I have attached a link to some local real estate listings in my area for your review.
http://www.123-real-estate-los-angeles.com/beverly-hills-real-estate-listings.html
If you want me to contact this agency on your behalf, I'd be happy to |