Dear Flora... We think that your story uses good description, and also that your names for your characters are very interesting and creative: (killsalot and whatsitworth). However, we feel that the amount of morbid killings of puppy dogs and kittens is a bit overdoing it, and distracts from the plot. Great story...it was good! luv      The WIERd Ones! GordonGraydon SPS writes: Hey there JacobHespler peoples!      I just wanted to let you know that none of the cute puppies or kittens ever got killed. They were lined up, but they never got killed.  That's just too mean for me to write. I'm an animal person......so I couldn't do that.  So now you know...... bye! luv,    Flora Hi Flora, my name is Kendelle and I am in grade 8. I thought your story was really humorous, and it has a great vocabulary! However, your story had me sitting on edge up until such an abrupt ending. I think your story could have become even more interesting if you had made the ending a little later on. Nonetheless, it is a fantastic story! : )  Keep on writing! -Kendelle Dear Flora, At last I've had the chance to get to your story. I've checked through the folder and realized I'd promised you a response on Friday or Monday and here it is Wednesday evening - sorry about that! There is just so much work that I lost track. You've already had some positive student responses to your story. Perhaps you should have begun it with a disclaimer indicating that  "no animals were harmed in the writing of this story"! I also, along with the student commentators, enjoyed the puns used in the names. I didn't get "Justin Credible" until I read the story - pretty tone deaf of me not to... Lots of energy and panache in this story. I like Justin's adventures, and your playful attitude towards them. I was a bit confused by your introduction, though, because I don't know if you're making fun of his poverty or if we're meant not to take it seriously at all... It reminds me a bit of Roald Dahl (I don't think I've spelled his name correctly - sorry about that), and it's an aspect of his writing that I'm not actually fond of. Although it's comic that Justin's imaginative adventures are written in a hyperbolic style, I'm not sure that applying the same tone to Owen's life really works. I also wonder whether you want to refer to his other adventures in such a rushed fashion; it seems a bit too quick a reference for us to really catch on to what's happening. Why would there be clanging and thumping to kill the puppies and kittens? And do you think this is too reminiscent of 101 Dalmatians? Should Nurse Killsalot have another, more original evil plot? Students had commented that your ending was too rushed, and I'd agree. If you do decide to trim a bit at the beginning, and then take a bit more time at the end, I think you'll have a more balanced plot. Thanks for sending this; I enjoyed it! Rhea T. Dear Flora, Your story was very interesting. I didn't really like it, but I'm not into that sort of writing. One thing that I didn't understand was all that &# and numbers stuff. What was that? Did it stand for something? You were very good at describing things. I could see them very vividly. If you could write back and tell me what those things meant, it would be really cool. Thanks! Sincerely, Christine Dear Christine,      Thank you for your response.  All the numbers and junk was a problem with the system.  I didn't put them in for any purpose, they were just applied by accident.  I put the story back on again without all that stuff......ok? Flora