Dear Rhea,                     These are my revisions Before Snake could hit Max again, he whipped his legs up and wrapped them around Snake’s head with a slight twist of his legs.  Snake fell to the floor with a thump.  With only a minute left until launch, With  Maxs last bit of stranght he untied himself, ran to the first nuke and started trying to disarm it. The time had hit twenty-five seconds and Max had only disarmed one nuke and was starting on the second.  Just before the time ended Max finished disarming one more nuke but couldn’t disarm the last two.  The two nukes lit up the sky like fireworks.Max soaked with sweat ran down the hall truing to find the control room. Door after door Max finally found the right one.  As Max walked into the room he found himself surrounded by  computers and a big window at the front of the boat. Max started looking for the computer that controlled the course of the bombs, Finally after a couple of minutes Max found the right one and started entering the code to change the course of the bomb.  Three minutes before the nukes hit Chicago, Max changed the course so that they would explode under water. “That was close” Max said with exhaustion. Max heard a faint nose of an intercom and followed the sound. When Max got to the intercom and heard the seargents voice. “Max Chicago doesn’t  even know how close they came to extinction.  Don’t  go anywhere were coming to pick you up”   “Like I have a choice” Max said quietly

and Rhea responded

Dear Rob, I think you've got the right idea here in terms of adding more physical details so that the action doesn't go quite as quickly. Again, I'd ask you to proof before you submit work to WIER; there were so many typos here that at times the story was hard to follow. Rhea T.