Dear Rhea Here are some changes to the 1st paragraph to A Hero Is A hero is thought  to be a person who saves someone who is in danger by  showing signs of bravery, and courage.  For example, when a person runs into a burning building, picks up a child and carries the child out, this person shows physical heroism. And in my opinion that person is a hero.  When a mother, in a fleeting panic, lifts a car  to save her own son or daughter, she shows physical strength and is a hero. But physical strength is not the only characteristic that is needed to be called a hero.  In my opinion a hero is a person who will help someone in need of comfort no matter what the circumstances.  If there’s a problem they’ll try their best to either fix it or help out.  For example people that try to help the homeless are in my heart considered a hero.  Schools that have food drives for people less fortunate are also heroes to those families that don’t have it so good.  A hero doesn’t only need physical strength but  must have a great heart and will power. Sean, you paint an affirming portrait of Marcus Camby by stating may of the charitable deeds he does.  We thought that you might reconsider mentioning the choking boy; while it shows his dedication, we thought it was slightly morbid and took away from the positive atmosphere.  Sean, you did an excellent job of creating an interesting picture and giving your readers perspective into what a hero is.

and Rhea said

Dear Sean, I think you've really succeeded in making that opening paragraph more clear. It's funny how things have to be spelled out this way; often if they're clear in our own heads, it seems unnecessary to spell it all out. But in fact, it does strengthen your argument to walk through the various approaches to heroism in this way. Glad you could put the extra time into this; I think it's been well spent. Rhea T.