| This story starts off like your average Mamoru- hating, Seiya-loving fic. Essential, Mamoru has been an ass to Usagi, she seeks refuge in Seiya, there's some sex... The fic changes the story-line by impregnating Usagi with what we presume is Seiya's child. Now, normally, I, a bona fied Seiya-lover, would enjoy this sort of fic. It's not that I hate Mamoru, it's that I'm turned on by Seiya O_O I MEAN...^^;; But you can see where the fic takes it's wrong turns from the beginning. First, the grammar is horrible. I mean, I'll let a few typos slide. Some of my favorite fics include the infamous non-existant words "adn" and "teh". But when it comes right down to it, it's really scary that some people cannot distinguish the difference between "your" and "you're". Second, Usagi quickly lands herself in Seiya's living arrangement, and takes on a very motherly attitude towards Yaten and Taiki. Now, being motherly is not an un-Usagi characteristic. But taking it is a very in-three lights characteristc. I was asked once what made me an authority on Yaten and would like to take this oppertunity to clarify why I have a right to say how Yat-chan would think. 1. I own all the SailorStars Manga 2. I own all the SailorStars Anime I have seen how Yaten acts. I know what happens to her. And let me tell you...Yaten doesn't take shit from anyone. It continues with the other Senshi being "okay" with Usagi's pregnancy, which soon becomes an 8 month pregnancy, in the span of only two chapters. Not to mention two short chapters. Essentially, the story is lacking in description. Mostly. I mean, you can only go so far with one idea. Actual Plot: 3/5 Been done I believe. Happy/Sad Factor: 1/5? I dont think there was really anything...happy OR sad...Seiya makes me happy though. Writing Style: 2/5 Doing ok...could be better SMUT leve: It's an NC-17 story...it gets a 5/5 hands down. Cherry-O says: Overall, since I've seen it before, It's already going down hill. Everyonce in a while you come across a fic that's been done before that has an interesting twist to it. This is not one of them. This is your happy, happy, hentai-at-heart, Cherry-O saying I'm out! |