Let me take an overall look.
Things I don't like;
1. The tallest building looks phallic while the other one needs a more oriental
cast (well we are a hundred miles west of Ankara). It also seems too high.
2. I need more perspective in the sky, more aerial direction, more light
direction.
I'll try and fix those ...
Something like this perhaps?
The problem of linking the sky to the ground now
arises. Perhaps I am trying too hard to complete the inside square of the
composition? Does it need to be completed at all or is the dark vertical line
on the right sufficient? We shall see.
I will also repeat the motiff on the tower
on the waggon wheel and the king's chair - thus creating a bit of repitition (patten).
The street composition is a simple 'light against
dark and dark against light'. On the right side I have dark forms and spears against a lightening blue-grey haze then, as we scan across street, the figures on the otherside become increasingly light until we create reverse - light figures against a dark background.
But I have that torch on the wall. You can see the problem; behind the
two breast-plated soldiers to the left of the king the wall goes from dark
to light for no apparent cause?
Perhaps I should remove the light and allow the dark to reach the first
level ...
As I work on that problem I will begin to add some form and detail to the figures.
Must elevate the waggon shaft and detail the
knot...
Also must think on what I want in the foreground?
I am almost past the 'chiaroscuro and design.' That is often the hard part. Soon I will
be able to place and work the major figures and this will be a test because future
problems will be mostly be a consequence of flaws that are already inbuilt. I know that if they persist I might have to do some radical alterations. Nothing
is certain.
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