Note how the head is now on the line of the
top left to bottom right diagonal, as is the upper torso and left thigh.
To counter this is the right shoulder line and the right leg. These elements
need strengthening. Also the color of that front pillow is frankly ... ugh!
and the folds are too defined.

I had in mind a soft felt cushion under the
right leg as a texture change but it is unnecessary. Darken and change
fold lines. The changes seem to have strengthened the left shoulder and
right leg lines. The front cushion is better, I will work it up later.
The satin sheet is growing very watery. I am
trying to keep the tones subdued and dark as later I will begin to lighten
everything from the center out, like an explosion. You can begin to see
the alternate composition element of the outward radiation with the lines
of the drapes and the butterfly ink-spot effect.

The corner where the front cushion meets the
left leg is too sudden, too defined ..!
My path is clear... I have subdued my extreme
tendencies long enough. I promise either success or failure in the next
stage - then again I have these defining moments of re-assessing my place
in the universe with fame and success and visions of living a life of ease and plenty in some
tropical clime. But gads! That is where I am now, where a dip in the
ocean is hardly bracing. Think of the worst ... I could teaching
art in a big city and earning a fortune.
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