Dialogue #1 -  “Not Alone Forever” Hello! This is Gabriela I really don't think that your story needs to fixed.  Its perfect the way it is. I am in grade 8 what grade R U in?  I would really love to hear your other stories.  About your story, it’s extremely realistic and exciting. I really thought that you were in grade 5 but then I knew that the writing of a grade 5 would not have such a high level of writing etc. Your story is like a touching Diary and it does not go on about non-related subjects. It all fits in well and does not leave you hanging. Does this story relate to you in any way? Oh and none of my work is on the wier site.  P.S. write Back I would love to hear from you. To Gabriela: I want to thank you for your comments on my piece.  No it does not really relate to me but I find a lot of people experience this.  I am in grade 12 and would like to know if you have suggestions for improvement.  Thank you and I would love to hear the suggestions (negative is okay) from you and your class. From Elizabeth Dear Elizabeth, I liked the way that you added more onto your story it makes more sense now how you’ve added more words and more parts.   Bye, Gabriela

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Dialogue #2 -  “Not Alone Forever” Hi!  This is Bobbi Jo and Nicole responding. We wrote to you earlier but in a group and now we've been split off into partners. Your story is great and very meaningful. The emotions that you expressed are really good. We like that the story is written from a grade five student's perspectives to match the storyline. Your story shows great imagination and is written like a diary. You get the point across and are very descriptive without dragging on. It is a truly amazing story. We both agree that we wouldn't change anything but we have a few questions.  Were you trying to target a younger audience? At the end when it says, 'I am me.' how does that fit in? Does the story relate to any of your own experiences?  Please write back we would love to hear from you. From, Bobi Jo and Nicole To Bobi Jo and Nicole I want to thank you for you for your comments.  It makes me very proud of myself.  I am in grade 12 and no there are no sequels yet.  To answer your questions, "I am me", is supposed to mean that the character was proud of himself and does not need to be pressured form others.  It doesn't really relate to myself.  Others go through it daily.  I was trying to target it to younger people but I guess it didn't work.  I'll fix later.  Thank you again. Elizabeth Hi!  We think your story is great!!!!  It was really interesting and it caught our attention. The revisions that you made helped the story. It helped it by making the story have more detail so the readers can get the picture of the story. It made it longer which is good. Did you have fun being a part of the wier project? We enjoyed being a part of it and reading your stories and voicing our opinions.  Do you think the wier project helped you with your writing? Do you think it will help you in the future? Well we agree that it didn't help us much at all because we didn't have any of our stories posted. But we did enjoy reading others and responding. We learned that revising is more important then we thought. We usually think that revising is spelling errors but wier has taught us that it's about ideas and content not just spelling and punctuation. What do you think? Do you agree with us? Bye, Bobi Jo, Gabby, Nicole