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        Poetry Workshops  
        
       METAPHORS WORKSHOPOur everyday language is woven of metaphors. Note the verb woven implies 
        our 
        language is a cloth, and thus this sentence has a hidden metaphor in it. 
        The 
        despised cliche is colorful metaphor that keeps on living and becomes 
        
        overused and hackneyed: eg:the hands of a clock, tied to his mother's 
        apron 
        strings, a check that bounces, an election won by a landslide, how fast 
        time 
        flies, mad as a hatter (chemicals in the hat maker's trade often made 
        them 
        crazy). 1 usually start off with a request for similes that come to mind (after 
        
        establishing students know the difference between a simile and a metaphor.)
        Simile -eg: happiness is like a butterfly, it only lasts a while.
        Metaphor -eg: happiness is a butterfly.
        School is like a circus --Ã school is a circus. Then I have students write similes and turn them into metaphors. Feelings are particularly inarticulate, wordless and almost always best 
        
        expressed in metaphor or simile. We have general words for emotions like 
        
        love, hate, awe, compassion, pity, but they are abstract words, not specific 
        
        enough. You could say you love your mother, your dog, pepperoni pizza 
        and 
        Hawaii. To verbalize the exact feeling, you could say "my love is 
        like a red, 
        red rose" or a yellow rose, a violet, or even pistachio ice-cream. 
        in such 
        cases, the speaker/writer borrows the vocabulary that belong to something 
        
        else and uses it to say what s/he wants to convey. Metaphors work in a bewildering number of ways and do a bewildering variety 
        
        of jobs, sometimes so complexly that a conscious analysis would need three 
        
        pages of prose to follow and describe how their effect is achieved. They 
        may 
        illustrate or explain (the body is a plumber's nightmare); they can 
        emphasize, heighten, shock, communicate information or ideas (see Sharon 
        
        Old's The Unjustly Punished Child where the child's character is hardened 
        
        like steel (iron & charcoal). Metaphors can carry a tone, a feeling or attitude, they can act as a 
        language 
        of associations as they do in Trumbull Stickney's (1874 - 1904) poem, 
        Sir, 
        Say No More. Sir, say no more,Within me 'tis as if
 The green and climbing eyesight of a cat
 Crawled near my mind's poor birds.
 The eerie sensation communicates perfectly though a critic might work 
        all day 
        to untangle the threads the image knots up so simply. (from Writing Poems 
        by 
        Robert Wallace) Exercise: Write a poem about yourself, the sway you seem to others and 
        the 
        way you see yourself, using metaphor in place of adjective eg"On the outside, I am a rock
 Inside, I'm a cotton sock. " etc
 Or: My head is baseball, my head is homework,
 My head is Madonna strutting on a stage.
 
   
  Photo into Poem WorkshopTo do this exercise, you need to spend some time locating a photograph 
        
        that snags and holds you, that something in you answers with interest 
        and 
        resonance. It need not be a "good" photograph-in fact, sometimes, 
        the 
        botched one will have more resonance. You might choose a photograph that 
        
        someone has taken of you or of some-one you know. Judith McCombs has a 
        
        wonderful poem on a photograph of her father and his ex-girlfriend who 
        was 
        not her mother, on what might have been but did not happen. Or you can 
        use a 
        photograph from an artistic or journalistic magazine (DoubleTake and National 
        
        Geographic are good sources.) Or a photograph that docu-ments a historical 
        
        event. Miles David Moore's fabulous poem "Dead Boy in the Road to 
        
        Fredericksburg" is written on Matthew Bradley's photograph of a casualty 
        of 
        the Civil War. See Guest Poets.  "…to see something in the form of a photograph 
        is to encounter a potential 
        object of fascination. Photographs, which cannot themselves explain anything, 
        
        are inexhaustible invitations to deduction, speculation, and fantasy."
        -- Susan Sontag, On Photography When you have found your photograph, spend some time writ-ing out just 
        what 
        you see in it: objects, landscape, people, clothes, trees, architecture, 
        
        light, and shadow. In a sense, you will have to narrate the photograph, 
        or at 
        least make images so that we can, literally, see what you are talking 
        about 
        without seeing the photograph. Then, using the same photograph, write 
        
        different poems from it, from some of the following perspectives or 
        points-of-view: 1. the photographer.3. someone or something in the photo-graph.
 5. yourself addressing the poem to someone in the photograph.
 An additional shift in perspective can be uncovered by writing poems 
        in which 
        you manipulate time. 1. Write what happened just before the photograph was taken.2. Write what happened as the photograph was being taken, outside the 
        range
        of the camera.
 3. Write the poem as if you have found the photograph years after it was 
        
        taken.
 4. Write exactly the same poem in three versions: in the present tense, 
        the 
        past tense, and the future tense.
 John Szarkowski writes, "Photography is a system of visual edit-ing. 
        At 
        bottom, it is a matter of surrounding with a frame a portion of one's 
        cone of 
        vision, while standing in the right place at the right time. Like chess, 
        or 
        writing, it is a matter of choosing from among given possibilities." 
       One way of revising poems is to shake up the original poem, to see it 
        
        from different perspectives, to re-see it. Sudden shifts in perspective 
        open 
        a poem up to us again and help us to surpass our resistances to revision: 
        
        stubbornness, attachment to predictability, and the touching, understandable 
        
        love of our own first seeing. One way of "practicing" revision 
        is to work a 
        poem that has the same focus of attention through several different points 
        of 
        view. While the focus of the poem remains the same, we can see how we 
        speak 
        it, revising by generating new poems. Photos provide a stable focus and 
        seem 
        to be especially suited to writing with these kinds of shifts. Maggie Anderson says, "Any photograph is a record made by a person 
        who 
        was shifting around something shifting that they saw." When we look 
        at a 
        photograph, we shift around what the photographer has made to stand still. 
        
        Imagine the lives that came to that point of time in the photograph, imagine 
        
        the "what might happen and did not", imagine the lives after 
        that point in 
        their timelines and you will find your poems. Wishing you shifting cones of perception,Hilary Tham 2000
 Hilary Tham 2/7/99
 
   
 TEMPLATE POEMSometimes, using a poem with strong unusual grammar structures can be 
        a 
        challenge that starts the creative juices flowing. I took Marianne Moore's 
        
        poem "The Mind is an enchanting thing" which had an unusual 
        amount of similes 
        and came up with "The Male". I followed the structure of the 
        poem until the 
        fourth stanza at which point my poem took off on it's own. 
        Take a poem you like and write a poem using the grammatical structure 
        of that 
        poem... substitute a different noun for a noun, adjective, verb, adverb 
        etc. 
        Have fun with it. THE MALE The male is an easy loving thingis an easily loved thing
 like a new puppy
 eager to please, ardent in adoration
 like Isaiah preaching in the valley of dry bones.
 Like that same puppynew returned from obedience school,
 or the kitten that smells on you
 iridescent scales of fish, the male
 feeling his way around your body, your heart,
 walks beside Woman leashing his gaze from others.
 He has not Woman's memorythat can remember without
 invention.
 Like a tree falling in the forest
 with no one to hear, her voice
 will become background music to his ears,
 a fly's weak buzz between window panes.
 Why are the women lying down like fieldswhile the wintry sun shines thin and bleak
 and the wind blows cold with the smell of snow?
 His is the force of a storm,hard rain, the brevity of excess. His love
 is like the peacock's tail
 roused by genetic code, driving
 to propagate itself against extinction.
 The male burrows, impelled like the wasp that lays its eggs
 in the flowering fruit of the fig,
 and dies there in the fig.
 The male struts his peacock walk,
 bows and dances to female rhythms, knows
 his loins will dance against hers, and flesh
 will form and come alive
 on the mounds in Death's Valley.
 So the women lie down like fieldswhile the wintry sun shines thin and bleak
 and the wind blows cold with the smell of snow.
 by Hilary Tham
 
 Children's Workshops
  
 Political Nursery RhymesThe Clerihew is a comparatively new form of verse. It got its name from 
        its inventor, a writer of detective stories, E. C. Bentley, whose middle 
        name was Clerihew. Clerihews are short; they are never more than four 
        lines and they always begin with the name of a famous character But the 
        facts about him/her are seldom right. In fact, they are grotesquely - 
        and purposely- wrong. Henry Taylor has just come out with a whole book 
        of clerihews titled Brief Candles. I recommend it highly.  Edward the ConfessorSlept under the dresser.
 When that began to pall,
 He slept in the hall.
 -- E. C. Bentley
 Said Sir Christopher Wren,"I'm having lunch with some men.
 If anyone calls,
 Say I'm designing Saint Paul's."
 -- E. C. Bentley
 When Alexander PopeAccidentally trod on the soap,
 And came down on the back if his head
 Never mind what he said.
 -- E. C. Bentley
 Alfred, Lord TennysonLived upon venison;
 Not cheap, I fear,
 Because venison's deer.
 -- Louis Untermeyer
 Francesca de RiminiLived in a chiminey,
 Full of ghouls in the gloam.
 But still, home is home.
 -- Louis Untermeyer
 Although the BorgiasWere rather gorgeous,
 They liked the absurder
 Kind of murder.
 -- Louis Untermeyer
 Once there was a young lad named Bill One day, he climbed an Arkansas hill
 He then thought, "I want fame."
 To bad it would lead to America's shame
 
  
 ClerihewsBill Clinton, an Arkansas man,took part in a terrible scam.
 With Whitewater dough he bought stuff like a sauna,
 and besides that he smoked marijuana.
 -- Nate Raines
 --
 Timothy Viegh says, "I am not the bomber,"
 America thinks,- "He's a goner,"
 His sister says, "He's the guy,"
 If they believe her, no more will he be able to lie
 -- Geoff Roulil
 Lisa Gnugnoli wrote a poem, The poem made no sense.
 She crumpled it up and threw it away
 And then jumped over a fence.
 -- Lisa Gnugnoli
 Bill and Hill went to Capitol Hill. Bill fell down and broke his crown
 and the propaganda soared
 and is soaring still.
 -- Mike Welsh
 
 Bill Clinton had a dream
 That he was punching a door.
 When he woke up,
 He was punching Al Gore.
 -- William Mendoza
 
   
 Rolling Simile poem:The whole group sits in a circle and each participant writes a simile 
        with a second line that makes the connection for the two, however wild. 
        Or the class is divided into groups of 2, 3 or 4 and each group comes 
        up with and writes a couple with a simile in the first line and the connecting 
        statement in the second line. eg: Justice is like Ray Charles, both are 
        blind. The whole point is to play with images and language and have fun. 
        Usually a concrete thing is compared to an abstract noun like emotion 
        or homework. Then pass the paper to the person to the right (or left) 
        and keep going. The next person writes another simile using one of the 
        two compared nouns in the first simile, adding a line as the raison dêtre. 
        Everyone should be writing on a paper at all times. After each paper has 
        about 6 similes, they should write a wrap-up or concluding simile and 
        then have each read aloud the paper in hand. The fun part is the reading 
        aloud of the poems of course.
 Rolling simile poems by some of my Yorktown High School studentsWriting poetry is like bungee jumping
 In both, you take a risk.
 Bungee jumping is like a child in the womb,
 both are dependent on the strength of the cord.
 A child in the womb is like an unborn egg,
 both are fragile.
 --Justice is like Ray Charles
 both are blind and ohh! so funky.
 Talent is like being born with blue eyes, you either
 have 'em or you don't.
 Talent is like a headache,
 you cant see it but you can feel it.
 A headache is like a bagpipe,
 shrilly irritating.
 A bagpipe is like a car, something I don't have.
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 A dancer is like water, both are
 free and flowing, and can go
 wherever they choose.
 Water is like spring, arousing joy in sparrows
 and sprites alike.
 Spring is like fire,
 radiant and bursting with life.
 Fire is like inspiration - both can spark
 a priceless possibility.
 Inspiration is like a shooting star, both come and go.
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 Women are like jello: I can make them jiggle yet I don't
 Know how they're made.
 Jello is like men: clear, transparent and melting away.
 Men are like tools, reliable and trustworthy if well kept,
 but faulty with all forms of age.
 The mind is like a mechanical pencil,
 it won't write until you fill it with something.
 A mechanical pencil is like telling a lie,
 it never works.
 A lie is like the truth - it
 can shield you for a time.
 The truth is like me, honest and pure.
 I am like a caterpillar, wanting to
 emerge from my cocoon.
 A caterpillar is like the world,
 bursting forth in renewal and light.
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 Newspaper is like hell, always
 ripping and tearing you apart.
 Newspaper is like a hand of poker, you
 never know what you're going to get.
 Life is like a game of poker, even if
 you get dealt a bad hand, you're stuck with it.
 A game of poker is like a guy,
 stupid in concept, insincere and complete with beer.
 A guy, a certain guy, is like a young child,
 clumsy and cute, unaware of how special he is.
 A young child is like a puppy trying to catch his tail
 and smiling clueless at the world.
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 Sadness is like a blanket, covering all
 it touches.
 A blanket is like a mother,
 offering security at any time.
 A mother is like a warm cup of hot cocoa,
 warm and soothing.
 A warm cup of hot cocoa is like a best friend.
 Both make you feel happy, comfortable
 and welcome.
 A best friend is like the sun on a warm spring day,
 bringing a wide smile to my face.
 A warm spring day is like birth, the reincarnation and
 regeneration of life.
 Steam is like a sizzling gasp of breath.
 Breath is like a person's first love,
 satisfying a longing desire.
 Love is an eternal spring, it changes you forever.
 An eternal spring is like herpes,
 it won't go away.
 Herpes is like an annoying younger brother;
 it comes out from hiding at the most
 inconvenient times.
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 Taking a test is like sawing your arm off
 to save your life. You lose either way.
 Sawing your arm off to save your life is,
 like, a big chunk of wood.
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 On slick roads, my car handles like a hockey puck.
 A hockey puck is like a chocolate but no candy center.
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 Friends are like chocolate cake, you can never
 have too many.
 Chocolate cake is like heaven -
 always amazing you with each
 taste or feeling.
 Chocolate cake is like life with so many
 different pieces.
 Chocolate cake is like happiness,
 you can never get enough of it.
 Happiness is like a cold shower,
 shocking yet exhilarating.
 A cold shower is like an empty forest,
 cool, quiet yet musical in the experience.
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 Jazz is like a frozen pond, always smooth-cool.
 A frozen pond is like sleep, tranquil, still and full
 of surreal possibilities.
 Sleep is like teflon, elusive and difficult to grasp.
 Teflon is like cool man because it doesn't get hot.
 Cool man is like a styro-foam cup, it works well until
 he gets too much pressure.
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 New York is like a polar bear swim,
 cold at first but refreshing and exhilarating
 once you're in all the way.
 A polar bear swim is like an ice-cream headache - ouch!
 An ice-cream headache is like a broken bone,
 throbbing, pulsing with pain.
 A broken bone is like a traffic jam, both keep you from
 doing something quickly.
 Life is like a traffic jam, always
 stopping and going.
 A traffic jam is like me - always
 frustrated with itself.
 Josh is like a leaky faucet, he never stops.
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 Crying is like running a marathon,
 it's painful while you're doing it but you feel
 great after you finish.
 A marathon is like a really bad RV show.
 You think it's over, but it only gets worse.
 A really bad TV show is like your mother;
 You can't turn it off.
 Your mother is like a running brook,
 always there and always clean.
 A running brook is like a car-
 it can go in any direction.
 Life is like a running car - always
 ready to go.
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 Life is like an improvisationary violin solo; you make it up
 as you go along and make lots of mistakes.
 A violin solo is like fingernail clippings flowing
 through slate pipes.
 Slate pipes are like chalkboards. When you scratch them,
 they screech.
 Chalkboards are like moving to a new house;
 anything that was written before can be erased
 and rewritten.
 Moving to a new house is like reading a new book.
 They have endless possibilities.
 Books are like life. We see ourselves
 through others' experiences.
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 Friendship is like Advil,
 candy-coated, but bitter on the inside,
 nonetheless soothing in the long run.
 Advil is like constructive criticism,
 hard to swallow, but eventually, you
 will be better because of it.
 Constructive criticism is like a swim workout;
 you know it will help you in the long run but
 it'll make you cringe.
 A swimming workout is like mud wrestling,
 all fun and games but hard to clean up after.
 Mud wrestling is like football - pointless.
 Football is like macho homo-erotic violence.
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 My thoughts are like a river.. always flowing
 and never ending.
 My thoughts are like the weather;
 sometimes cloudy & sometimes clear.
 The weather is like a box of chocolates;
 you never know what you're gonna get.
 Chocolates are like surfing in the waves,
 absolutely wonderful.
 Surfing in the waves is like a rolling simile;
 you never know where you'll end up
 'til you get there.
 
   
 Rolling HaikuThis is great with kids/adults who have practiced writing haiku a little. 
        Every one takes a paper and writes a haiku on it. Pass the paper. The 
        next person writes a tanka (2 lines of seven syllables) below the haiku, 
        using one thing or word from the preceding stanza. Pass the paper. Next person writes a haiku related to one of the nouns in the tanka. So 
        the order goes Haiku - tanka - haiku - tanka -haiku - tanka - haiku - 
        tanka until about 6 - 10 people have had a say on each paper. Since everyone 
        starts a paper, everyone should working on a rolling haiku to at any given 
        moment during this exercise. Have students read aloud the group poem they 
        wrote the last stanza for.
 Variation on this exercise is to have the group begin with a starter 
        haiku -- the same one for all and you/they will be amazed at how many 
        different directions each poem goes from the same starting point. After 
        the completion of the rolling haiku, each student can write their chosen 
        rolling haiku on a rice-paper scroll (one stanza per section) and draw 
        a Chinese brush and ink image to complete the group work.
 Sample rolling haiku:Cuckoo singing loud.I have nothing to do now,
 Neither does the weed.
 Weeds in the field grow and growBeing old, I shrink and shrink
 In the fields, weeds anda lone black crow crying out
 There is nothing to eat.
 Nothing is good to eat when youve the flu or mother scolds.
 Listen to the child crying, abandoned in the
 backyard with dead grass.
 The winds blow cold and white.We shall have snow by and by.
 A snowy morning.Chewing dried salmon  alone.
 Happy by myself.
 Happy sound of childrens playin snow. I stay by the fire.
 
 --- Hilary Tham 2/25/99
 
   
 Self-portrait WorkshopChildren love to think and write about themselves. I begin with an Art 
        Activity: I have students draw a self-portrait using hand mirror and markers, 
        crayons / pen/ pencils. It can be a serious self-portrait or a modernistic, wacky portrait.I tell them after they have drawn 
        their portrait, Ill like them to look at the face in the mirroe 
        and the face in the picture. Things to think about: What do you notice 
        first, any distinguishing mark that stands out? What do you like best 
        about your face/ hair etc. What do other people usually compliment you 
        on?
 What aspect of you would you wish different? Jot down thoughts, phrases, 
        words.
 I tell students they can write in the third person or personify the featuree.g. 
        This face gets up in the middle of the nightThis face goes to bed in the morning. This face goes boldly where feet 
        dont want to go. and so on..
 Or Write a poem about something triggered by looking at your drawing. 
        It can be a physical feature e.g. "My Nose"My nose is like a hook
 In the center of my face
 Catching smells.
 By Anna J, Copetanalos, Drew Elem. School 1998
 Additional Writing exercise: Now draw a self portrait of your face 
        as it may look in 20 years, or 30 years. Think about cycles
 seasons. 
        Use 3 similes at least ( from visual, sound , smell , taste or touch).
 
   
  Nesting Rhymes poemTake a word (of three or more syllables) write it on the blackboard and 
        have students brainstorm what other words come to mind or may be found 
        as anagrams in the word, eg EMOTION, MOTION, OCEAN, SHUN. or AGGRAVTION, 
        GRAVEL, RAVEL, RAVE, AVE in descending syllabic run. THEN write a poem 
        using those words for a poem that is rich is assonance. The point of this 
        exercise is to take the mind from normal patterns of thinking or following 
        an idea along logical paths. This way, you make strange and fun leaps 
        to other words that are nested inside the big word. They can reverse the 
        order in the poem so they go from simple one syllable word to that big 
        word. Like ask, raid, rude, mosque, made, quad, masquerade. Clincher is 
        tell them the poem does not have to make sense for this exercise. Variation: Challenge them to write a 12 line poem, 4 stanzas of 3 lines 
        each.. Each stanza uses a diminishing rhyme. e.g. stanza one, the first 
        line would end with the word obtrude, the second line end with rude, and 
        the third line end with rue. Stanza 2 would use another nesting rhyme 
        set: its lines would end in 1)learn, 2)earn, 3)ear. More ambitious students 
        could use the same ONE nesting rhyme for all four stanzas.  Examples: Nesting rhyme: - vagrant  grant  rant  ran - ant Sample poem: Walking without care, I saw this vagrant
 On the corner of Fourth and Grant
 and ran when he began to rant
 Gimme an ant, gimme an ant!
 List these on board as examples of possible nesting rhymes to use and 
        have them do a practice run on the blackboard of their own nesting rhymes. Disappear apple - pear  earengine  nine  gin  in
 quaver  aver- ave
 gravel  ravel  rave  grave  lave
 prayer  pray  pay rare
 seasoning  season  sea  son
 reverberate  berate  revere  rate - ever  bear 
         be
 kalaidescope  scope  code  kale  slide  
        cope  cop
 bramble  ramble  ram  ROM
 charmer  harm  arm
 engagement  gage  age  mage
 scaffold  scoff  scold - fold  old
 scatter  cater  scat sat  cat
 intertwine  tine  twine  wine  wire  tire 
         inert
 cockatrice  rice- ice
 incandescent  descent  scent  cant  cane  
        Cain
  
 LIMERICK
 Children love rhyme and rhythm. Limericks satisfy these and hone their 
        enjoyment of poetry. A most popular nonsense verse form, usually associated 
        with Edward Lear. The poem consists of 5 lines rhyming aabba. Lines 3 
        and 4 are some times written as a single line with an internal rhyme.- - / - - / - - /(a) - - / - - / - - /(a)
 - - / - - / - - /(a) - - / - - / - - /(a)
 - - / - - / - - /(a) - - / - - / (b) - - / - - /(b)
 - - / - - /(b) - - / - - / - - /(a)
 - - / - - / - - /(a)
 There once was a dog named Bob
 Who wanted to eat a frog
 But the frog was quite fat
 So they both just sat
 So there they sit, the dog and the frog.
 Chris Kaas
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 There once was a president named Bill,,
 White water drove him up a hill,
 All the lawyers were talking,
 About sending him walking,
 But he managed to escape without frill.
 -- Thomas Woo
 Hillary and BillHillary and Bill went up the hill
 to fetch a pail of whitewater,
 when Congress found out,
 Bill suffered a drought,
 and all of his respect was slaughtered.
 -- Yohan Ferdinando
 Thee blind mice, Three blind MiceSee how they run, See how they run.
 They all ran away from the presidents tricks
 Who taxed all their glasses and walking sticks
 Have you ever seen such from an Arkansas hick
 Three poor mice, Three poor mice.
 by Todd Orabowsku
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 There once was a man named Paul
 He wanted to go to a costume ball
 He decided to risk it And go as a biscuit
 But a dog ate him up in the hall.
 - Zach La Plante
 There once was a bald man named Tom He smelled just like a stink bomb
 His teeth was all yellow
 T'was an ugly young fellow
 And he got all his looks from his mom.
 - Jesse Knipling
 There once was a man named MikeWho really wanted to fight
 He fought so much
 He punched his huge lunch
 And that's what happened to Mike.
 - Tony Santelli
 There once was a girl named Jill,She married a guy named Bill.
 They had a lot of years Without any tears
 And their favorite food is krill.
 - Newton Graca
 Jack and Jill went up the hillTo fetch a pail of water.
 Jack fell down
 and broke his crown
 And Jill went looking for a lawyer-
 --Hilary Tham
 Pres. Bill Clinton felt quite blue,He dreamed that pretty Paula said she'd sue.
 He woke in a fright
 On a white house night
 And found his dream girl had spoken true.
 - Hilary Tham
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 Nursery Rhymes make wonderful templates/ structures for political satires.
 Mayor Marion Barry,His wife so contrary,
 How does D.C. grow?
 With bullet shells, and deep drug wells
 and pretty policemen all in a row.
 - Rebecca Miller
 Rub-a-dub dubBill Clinton in a tub
 With a woman drinking champagne.
 Along came his wife
 With a really big knife
 And that was the end of his campaign.
 - Samara O'Shea
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