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					the phoenix and the flame by PatR http://www.sonic.net/LightStreams/AAfanfic/phoenix.html SYNOPSIS: Janice and Mel admit their feelings to each other in New Orleans. In the meantime, we find a few ghosts and guilt trips lurking in Mel's closet. EWOK: Sex on a staircase, with the neighbours watching? NANCY: Not up to that yet, I'm at the beginning. An air hostess is cracking on to Janice on the plane. Now why haven't *I* ever had any air hostesses like that?? I never get sexy stewardesses who flash their legs at me. Isn't my leather catsuit sexy enough?? Or are fedoras really that attractive? EWOK: Maybe you should get a pelt? *evil grin* NANCY: How many air hostesses have you had flirting with you lately, eh? EWOK: *raising an eyebrow* And just where did you think all the Amazons went after the industrial revolution? NANCY: *ROFL* Methinks we should get back to the story...<g> EWOK: All right. Tell me, *where* is this sentence going? excerpt: The car ride into the Garden District was uneventful, though Janice had never been in New Orleans, she thought she knew what to expect. Not to New Orleans, that's for sure... excerpt: I could have used one of those back in Macedonia when we faced Ares. If I'd had a God of War doll, I would have jammed a gigantic pin up its ass. NANCY: I don't know how Janice-like it is, but this line scores the story at least a 5/10 from me!! *g* EWOK: *pained look* Nancy! Bring back Nancy! I don't like this new personality of yours, Ms Grussendorf! NANCY: Unfortunately, this writer is rapidly running out of good lines the closer we get to the sex. Symptomatic? EWOK: Of what? If your primary goal is to get your protagonists into the sack, you're not left with much to follow it with. NANCY: However, she does stick in one more great line: excerpt: "Janice, do you trust me?" Mel loosened her grip but still kept hold of her friend's hand. "Of course I do. With my life." "But do you trust me to order for us?" I really like! NOT the line I expected:-) I like being surprised. EWOK: *laughing* Points! Points! A good line redeems a thousand sins... NANCY: There are a thousand sins to redeem. That sex scene is awfully trite, the marriage proposal from the ex boyfriend, Mel's persistent cries of "lesbianism being evil and how could she possibly deserve Janice?" going on and on and on... NANCY: This a real mixed bag, some winners, some losers. I guess that brings us out round about the middle? 5/10 EWOK: I'll give it 4 1/2, on the strength of those good lines I know are in there. And that stewardess? She gets an 8... ;)