Reviews For Jan. 19- Dec. 26
CRITIQUE OF THE WEEK
Cassie Hanaway
Critique Page Editor
Best Review
I like this review because Ken tells that he knows the way that Beth feels. He tells her that he can relate to the situation of the poem. I liked it when he told Beth that the poem reaches a place that most people will not admit they have been to. That shows that he knows the situation of the poem and he admits it. Cassie
- *****
Shady Disposition
By Beth Adair
This poem reaches to a place that most of us won't admit we've been. Beth is telling the sad tale, in all it's richness, of depression. The only thing that brought the madness of this poem to a halt for me was the way she stopped one rythm, and began another. I read this poem all the way through, and decided that she speaks the truth, the awful feelings, and the blaming of others. I liked the way beth told of how she wished others, or perhaps one person, would "let her in", because i know how she feels. The sad thing is that looking in from the outside, one might think that she brought all of this misery upon herself. I see another story... Well done.
Ken Bushnell
Honorable Mention
I like this review also because Cindy says that she is a mother as well and she has experience of the wait, the impatience, and the excuse. She also said that she too has disappointed her kids. She said that it made the poem seem more like a story. Cassie
- *****
The Wait, The Impatience, The Excuse By Jessica Sayer
I have not been back to this site for four months and this was the first title that caught my eye. I happen to be a mother as well and sometimes I have disappointed my kids. The reality of the poem makes this poem like a story. Good going.
Cindy Sorburn
- ****
Babe Magnets By Ken Bushnell
Men are always suspicious of a woman's intent, but I would say stereotyping all women as hunting for only good looking men is a little ridiculous. A few bimbos give all women a bad name.
Cindy
- ****
Socks By Ken Bushnell
Very clever. I'll think twice before throwing away that next holey sock. Just watch grammar & punctuation...also avoid parentheses as much as possible. Oh, and maybe I'm just a clueless teenager, but who's Don Johnson? You did a good job.
Nathan Black
- ****
How My Husband Lost His Teeth By Jo Ann Mann
thought it was good , i liked the way your character lost his teeth
Tabitha
- *****
The Coming Collision Is it too late to jump off? By Stu Engle
Intelligent construction, balancing several key thoughts and joining them
nicely. I was kind of expecting some sharper jabs, though, which I don't
know if it's all that easy to do with such dire subject matter.
Ken Bushnell
- ****
Burn Out On the Bubble Wrap Line By Ken Bushnell
I enjoyed the story. It had good, realistic dialogue and the story line had an interesting ending. My only problem is it was a little too long for my taste. But, on the other hand, I did read it all without any problems.
Derek Bracer
- *****
The Better Bunny By Charilette Rai Sweeney
You write very well, but I have to admit that I was confused by this piece. It begins very nostalgically, and then moves into the story of someone's life being ruined. Perhaps a little more explanation is needed.
Nathan Black
- *****
Illusions by Brynne Ferguson
Powerful, powerful, powerful.
pj
- *****
Things Aren't What They Seem by Geraldine Cook Davis
Very good--the irony of this piece is quite powerful. You say a lot with very little, which is perfect for the Internet. Great job.
Nathann Black
- *****
Fast Talkin' Man by Beverly Caine
Your poems are rythmatic, well written and clear. I especially enjoyed the message of this one. Yea for common sense and self worth.
Diana Keeton
- *****
Things Aren't What They Seemby Geraldine Cook Davis
I get a thrill when I see such an original style. This thing dances.
Ken Bushnell
- *****
The Opposite Of Hopeless By Janelle Zimmerman
Janelle, I liked this piece. You held my interest and my taste runs to short works. I get lost swimming around in bunches of text. Keep on writing. You seem to have a way to say what needs to be said, simply and directly.
Raye McDonald
- *****
The Girl In The Rain by Miko
This story is so typical. The style is pretty concise and it leaves the reader with some questions, which is what I happen to appreciate. I like to use my imagination.
Derek Bracer
- *****
Things Aren't What They Seem by Geraldine Cook Davis
I enjoyed it. An afternoon lark by someone who is crazy. Of course, the underlying question is, "Is the woman really crazy?" I love it.
Derek Bracer
- ****
Why By Nicole Marjore Scheet
An excellent poem- I often question the same things and I believe this poem should hit home with everyone.
Jenny
- *****
The Headless Dog By Tony Adams
I really like this funny poem. It is simple and not too long; I know I will remember it.
Mary Alice Lonning
- *****
The Opposite Of Hopeless By Janelle Zimmerman
I liked the story and I believe it has been getting decent points because the story is good. I believe it should be more than just one paragraph. It seems like it is all one story, but I happen to like shorter, more concise paragraphs. They are easier to read.
Jerry Lewellen
- *****
The Color Of A Soul By Jason Walsh
absolutely enjoyed this poem. In today's age of hate without knowing, I think a poem like this cuts right to the heart of the matter- get to know the person inside and out. Great poetry here
Derek Bracer
- *****
Beauty Drips By Emily Janiak
An excellent example of imagery which is something I always look for in a good poem.
Jerry Lewellen
- *****
Things Aren't What They SeemBy Geraldine Cook Davis
Oh yes!! Classic. Short and oh so sweet. That anyone could pack so much REALITY in a story so short is beyond me!! Geraldine must have laughed hysterically as she wrote this classic piece!!
Bruce Longman
- *****
Socks By Ken Bushnell
OK, Nice try. Clever concept, but it was a little drool - do people still use that word? I liked it because it was fun, but I think that Ken could have done more with the subject. Short is good but in this case perhaps a little too short. Just as it was getting interstesting it ended.
Bruce Longman
- *****
A Brief Infatuation By Ken Bushnell
Very good reminds me of... we;; perhaps we should not egt into that right now!!! Very realistic Ken!! Captured the emotions just right. If I ad to try to find fault with the story it would only be because the paragraphs are a little long.. other than that GREAT!!
Bruce Longman
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