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Cassie Hanaway
Critique Page Editor
Reviews For Mar. 10- Mar. 17
CRITIQUE OF THE WEEK
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name = Alice Bateman
Submission_author = The Spirited Debate Between Men and Women by Ken Bushnell
Points = 5 points
opinion of the submission and author = Ken, I very much enjoyed this. Although it's something I might not ordinarily have noticed, I will certainly look for it now, the ways that woman in the service industries communicate with men. As I sit here, many examples parade through my brain. Is there something missing at the end? I was left not completely fulfilled, but intrigued. Alice
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name = Kristi Boone
Submission_author = A Message to the Lonely by Jack Mann
Points = 5 points
opinion of the poem and author = The only comment to make about "A Message to the Lonely" is this: Anyone can take it to heart. The loved as well as the lonely. A Favorite! KB
name = James Undershute
Submission_author = Eternal Love Dance by Dawn Draper
Points = 5 points
opinion of the submission and author = I like the fact that she is so deep with her thoughts
name = Alice Bateman
Submission_author = A Brief Infatuation by Ken Bushnell
Points = 5 points
opinion of the submission and author = Ken, this is so well written, I'm sorry I missed it before! Although I'm a woman, I was inside this man's head throughout each moment of the story. Maybe if the men would start to follow the instinct to talk, or the women appeared a little more receptive to attention, there wouldn't be quite so many alone and lonely people in this world! Thanks for taking us on a walk through the mind of a man. Are sports really that enthralling? ***LAUGH***
name = TCC
Poem_author = Seattle Rain by R.L. Walker
Points = 5 points
opinion of the poem and author = Another wonderful contribution by the author. The magical spirit of a 4 year old is captured. I laughed out loud as I read the piece. Just great!
name = Danny Bridge
Submission_author = My Dad's Gun by Eric Rodriguez
opinion of the submission and author = I loved this story. That is very weird how that happend. Your dad was with you.
name = Eric Rodriguez
Story_author = It Can't End Like This... by Gary Gordon
Points = 4 points
opinion of the story and author = I have to admit, I didn't really like the story. But it is a creative plot. Ladies and gentlemen, we've found the next Stephen King!
name = Eric Rodriguez
Submission_author = Peace by Kim Knight
Points = 5 points
opinion of the submission and author = Great poem, Kim! Keep up the good work!
name = Eric Rodriguez
Submission_author = Change by Jennifer Lawson
Points = 5 points
opinion of the submission and author = Nice poem, Jennifer. I know you basically speak for everyone with this poem--Why do we have to go through life we sufferings and trials? Keep up the good work
name = Kim Knight
Submission_author = My Dad's Gun by Eric Rodriguez
Points = 5 points
opinion of the submission and author = I thought that it was really well written. I'm the kind of person who likes a little mystery. The ending actually caught me off guard. I love how you had the burgerler still there. Another thing, considering you're a guy I love how the main character was a girl and that you were using her point of veiw.
name = Eric Rodriguez
Submission_author = Tears by Jennifer Lawson
Points = 5 points
opinion of the submission and author = Jennifer, you speak for everyone with your poems. Your poems tell how life is, the questions everyone has, or what things mean. Your poems are magnificent, and you should keep up the good work.
name = Eric Rodriguez
Submission_author = The Spark by Janelle Zimmerman
Points = 5 points
opinion of the submission and author = Great story, Janelle. I wish my Marching Band was as cool as yours, I guess. But you prove an example to everyone in a marching band that believes what they're going through is tougher than anything they've ever experienced, and want to quit. I, myself, am going through that very thing. But thanks for pointing me down the right path!
name = Kim Knight
Submission_author = The Spark by Janelle Zimmerman
Points = 5 points
opinion of the submission and author = I enjoyed your story. I, myself, am in a marching band. We go by the same rules for the love of the music, but sometimes it comes out of fear. That is fear of our instructor! I hope that you are having as much fun as you sound! What van I say go MARCHING BAND!!!
name = Bruce Longman
Story_author = I Met An Angel...by Jamie Kay
Points = 4 points
opinion of the story and author = As an ex-South African now living in the USA I found this story of particular interest - a touch of home at the Writer's Voice. A good story which held my interest to the end. I loved the way the main character's mind just puttered off in a gazillion directions imagining all sorts of things, very clever
name = Bruce Longman
Story_author = The Incident by Brian Willmott
Points = 4 points
opinion of the story and author = Only an English author would name a story with such understatement. Well, I would agree the story certainly left me with a sense of foreboding!! Clearly the name Saran was chosen for its similarity to satan, aptly chosen as well.
name = Tabitha Smith
Submission_author = My Trip To The Bridge by Janelle Zimmerman
Points = 5 points
opinion of the submission and author = It was a good story i think it will be a story people relate to i guess a lot of teens act like that is it a true story about you cause if it is you need to get help. keep writing it was a good sstory .!!!!!!!!!! GOOD JOB WRITE AGAIN
name = Patricia Mclaughlin
Submission_author = Deep Feelings by Ashley Robinson
Points = 5 points
opinion of the submission and author = It was great. Great words for the feeling everyone goes through.Keep writing!
name = Patricia Mclaughlin
Submission_author = The Opposite Of Hopeless by Janelle Zimmerman
Points = 5 points
opinion of the submission and author = It was beautiful. Maybe you'll write a book about it someday
name = Brian Willmott
Story_author = A Dragon's Death by George Lafferty
Points = 3 points
opinion of the story and author = Being a fan of Anne McCaffrey I read this story with interest, but maybe expected too much of the author. The tale was a bit dry to be compared with Anne's work and didn't match the title. How did Tiroth die? We are not told!
name = Matt
Submission_author = The Opposite Of Hopeless by Janelle Zimmerman
Points = 5 points
opinion of the submission and author = This was simply amazing. Janelle Zimmerman has a very promising future.
name = Kathleen Hodges
Poem_author = The Wedding Poem
by Alice Bateman
Points = 5 points
opinion of the poem and author = So very beautiful written from a sincere heart.
name = Kathleen Hodges
Poem_author = Eleusha
by Alice Bateman
Points = 5 points
opinion of the poem and author = I do enjoy Alice's poetry so much....It seems to come directly from her heart to others.
name = Kathleen Hodges
Poem_author = My Spirit by Alice Bateman
Points = 5 points
opinion of the poem and author = Seems this poem was written especially for me. Thank you, Alice.
name = Kathleen Hodges
Poem_author = I Am Just An Instrument by Alice Bateman
Points = 5 points
opinion of the poem and author = This poem stands for what I hope I am...and I pray that God will be able to use me as His instrument.
name = Kathleen Hodges
Poem_author = Mary Rose O'Donnell- Chapter 2
by Alice Bateman
Points = 5 points
opinion of the poem and author = Very enjoyable..Wanting to read the next chapter. I can identify with it so well..
name = Sarah Branigan
Submission_author = Wishing Daddy Out Of Heaven by Jo Ann Mann
Points = 4 points
opinion of the submission and author = It seems that this girl cared so much for her father that she thought of him more than herself and it was well put.
name = Kristin
Submission_author = Forever by Tyler Bateman
Points = 5 points
opinion of the submission and author = I thougtht it was really cute and sweet. You must like someone a lot.
name = Wendy Norton
Story_author = The Short Cut by Bruce Longman
Points = 5 points
opinion of the story and author = Very clever. Bruce does an excellent job using this thought dialogue of his effectively. Never expected the ending. Bravo.
name = Ken Bushnell
Poem_author = Seattle Rain by R.L. Walker
Points = 4 points
opinion of the poem and author = I'm a Seattleite and we were always hoping the rain would make the Californians go back home. Could you send them a copy. Nice story.
name = Ken Bushnell
Narrative_author = The Other Casualty Of War by Paul Bylin
Points = 5 points
opinion of the narrative and author = I gotta give this a 5 for honesty. Thank you for putting it on paper.
name = Lucy
Submission_author = The Opposite Of Hopeless by Janelle Zimmerman
Points = 5 points
opinion of the submission and author = Janelle's writing is very outstanding and she shows great maturity in her writing.
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