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					uncharted galaxies by b smith http://web.idirect.com/~katie/Raven/Uncharted%20Galaxies%20%5BPrelude%5D.htm SYNOPSIS: I didn't really get through this, so I'll give you the synopsis the writer gives herself (even though I think it's too sappy): "Megan is a recent graduate from a prestigious college of interstellar journalism and beginning a career of her own far from earth. Addison is a fearless renegade with a dangerous history known throughout the galaxy. Fate guides these women together, creating a friendship and an epic journey that was destined to occur. The stars have fallen and the descendants of the Warrior Princess and Amazon Bard are free to fly." EWOK: This one's boring. And uses fragmented. Sentences. NANCY: Heh, and the writer seems determined to rewrite the established Xena backstory in the first page. EWOK: And what's with the seagulls? NANCY: *shrug* beats me. I think perhaps more action and less attempting to set the mood would work here? EWOK: Depends what mood they're trying to set. David Attenborough: Warrior Princess. NANCY: I *knew* that tone reminded me of something! I was thinking, preamble to a film... but no! It sounds like the intro to a wildlife doco You're right! EWOK: Fear not. I know *all* about wildlife documentaries, Nancy... NANCY: Uggh, I've read into it a little and it doesn't seem to get much better. The speech is clunky and the doco speak description just keeps going. This might appeal to some people, just not me. It's long too, I don't think I can finish it. EWOK: The uber adjective, in its native habitat, is best distinguished by... NANCY: ...its overuse? Have you ever noticed how when Science Fiction is boring, it really is BORING? As in, it's a real art form to get beyond the tech stuff. Also, the temptation to just sit and describe the world you've created instead of just letting it unfold is really strong. Too much telling. I think SciFi would have to be one of the hardest genres to write in that way. EWOK: And there we have the problem with Episode One. NANCY: To be absolutely fair, perhaps if you persevere and read on to get a better idea of the characters through their actions this story will improve? I would recommend that people do that. I don't think I have the patience though. NANCY: Can't do a rating because I didn't finish it. Has potential, needs a good editor to go through and slash and burn to get rid of a lot of description. EWOK: Set phasers to stun!