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Reviews For Nov. 8- Nov. 14

1. ***** My Angel By Jennifer Hansen
   What a heart rending poem. Can really identify with it. Jo-Anne Griffiths

2. **** "My Angel" By Jennifer Hansen
   I liked the feel of the poem and the message Chris Hertrich

3. **** Silent Invader By Emily Janiak
   Very well done, it hits to the heart and fear of many women. Diana Keeton

4. **** The Wedding At The Stock Show Grounds By Raye McDonald
   Very good story, Descriptive and to the point! Jack Mann

5. ***** Moving To Alaska By Jack Mann
   Jack-Great voice, tone, overall style, tall-tale telling--a whopping 5! If you decide you want to rewrite,--ya, right,--you might want to lenghten your wrap up there, fella. Gerri

6. ***** Living In A Trailer House by Jack Mann
   It's certainly a five;your voice remains clear in all of your pieces. This piece is clever--love the snake--be careful to keep in one perspective--it's either "I" or "You;" don't use both. And, if that's the most obvious negative of your writing---go have a beer. Gerri

7. *** Dr. Andy Mull's Thooo by R.L. Walker
   Some good material--main fix needed--formated differently, presentation problem, but it's good. Maybe it's that it's a little too much for the kids and I need to see it broken down. )I could be the problem. Gerri

8. **** Snuff by Jo Ann Mann
   I like it, but I need to point out the things that need fixing--the title--"What am I Worth"--but the poem is about Grandma---not written in "I" perspective. Cut the first stanza; doesn't enhance poem, but takes away, doesn't forecast what's to come--five stanza, last line, word clutch--gotta go--fix and you have a five--I loved the women in the church--the tree--very well done--- Gerri

9. ***** Final Selectionby Raye McDonald
   Raye, you did a nice job in "showing" us a time that is difficult for many to handle and validating the right to take a stand against pressure decisions made during a stressfull period. I applaud your writing and your message. Diana Keeton

10. ***** Silence- Deadly or Golden By Raye McDonald
    Raye has a talent for saying a great deal in so few words. I enjoy reading your work. Diana Keeton

11. ** Blind Date By Jo Ann Mann
    Jo- You've got a great idea here--he could be passing up a great catch---also, wasn't sure if they were both speaking or just him--but I like the basic concept--and--sigh--truth of the poem Gerri

12. *** The Poet By Bill Elder
    I read your poem, with confusion. Not only that, one of us has a naughty twist, and I don't know which one it is. Oh, dear me. I am in a quandry. Gerri

13. *** Upon This Pond by Diana Keeton
    Diana-I like the line "Cry with him or cry alone"-interesting--terribly difficult poem to critique because of son, so I'm leaving it there Gerri

14. ***** Dance Of The Starling By Charilette Rai Sweeney
    Charilette, this is so filled with beautiful imagery - you have a wonderful gift. Thank you. Alice In Wordland

15. ***** Daydreams By Loyal Wray
    Thoroughly entertaining. Robert Young

16. ***** Snuff By Jo Ann Mann
    JoAnn, this is just hysterical. I love the way that you write. So honest and to the point! Raye McDonald

17. ***** Wishing Daddy Out Of Heaven By Jo Ann Mann
    This goes beyond mere Poetry. It is a "Song," sung well, by a loving daughter. Obviously this Father still lives ... in the minds, and hearts, of his children, and those who loved him. A most eloquent, poetic, tribute. R.L. Walker

18. ***** The Vow By Eric Rodriguez
    I enjoyed this story. I write a lot of what would be classified as Horror, however I don't like the blood and guts, I like being frightened and I like leaving the reader wondering if it were or could be true. You have captured that in this piece that is what makes it good. Diana Keeton Diana Keeton

19. ***** "Upon This Pond" By Diana Keeton
    This is very poem. It really touched my heart. I could tell the words came straight from your heart. Cindy Piazza-Ivy

20. ***** My Eternal Friend By Jennifer Hansen
    This is a sweet poem. Cindy Piazza-Ivy

21. ***** Tears By Jennifer Lawson
    This is such a true thing, tears... Cindy Piazza-Ivy

22. ***** The Cutest Little GirlBy Stu Engle
    Stu Engle does a very good job painting a very sad story. He places the reader in the middle of the situation and makes you feel the pain the family is going through. very well written. jfisk

23. ***** Christmas By Leisha Arnts
    Leisha, the message of your poem needs to be heard over and over. I appreciated the maturity of your writing at age 17. Keep writing and don't apologize for your beliefs. You never know how your words might impact a human life for good. Raye McDonald

24. ***** Upon This Pond By Diana Keeton
    This is a poem of faith and hope and makes you feel good about this world and this life. Brent Lane

25. **** Bitter Sweet Reality By J. Fisk
    Hey,J.--Wish we were in the same room talking. Clever using a vehicle other than the car to help show what's going on. At first, I didn't care for the lemons--"when life gives you lemons, etc."--but at times, near end, it was perfect vehicle to show how you felt---oh, and the company--sickening and so right on--you certainly followed through on your title---the ending hurt piece--you never mentioned God before--when you were first in the accident--and I've been in a few, it's God don't let this be happening, so I was surprised that you so clearly let a divinity in at the end--clutching --?? not sure---good piece-- Gerri

26. ***** 2055-Chapter 2 By Katie Jordan
    I am enjoying the story and look forward to more chapters. I too will be 100 yrs old in 2055. Re the warning from God: He promised no more floods! Check out a rainbow! Gwen