Reviews For Dec. 5- Dec. 14
CRITIQUE OF THE WEEK
I chose this review not just because it was longer, but because it had a thorough explanation of his opinion. He rated it with just three stars because he felt something was left out. He seemed to definitely like Jessica's intent of the story, but he wanted more to be brought out from it.
Cassie Hanaway
Critique Page Editor
- ***
Is Santa Really Santa Clause By Jessica Sayer
Now Jessica, I think you a brain run-a-way. LOL St. Nicholas, Santa Clause, Kris Kringle and all the rest of the names all mean the same thing, just in different languages. St. Nicholas was a Catholic Bishop from around the 8th century. He was actually the Bishop of Milan. The story that was handed down through the Church says he threw gold coins down the chimney of a poor peasant man so he could marry his beloved.This was done around Christmas time so the minds of men did the rest. If Santa Clause is the devil, then it is because we made him that way. My Mother always told me that Santa Clause was any one that loved you. I think that is the best answer. People have taken Christ out of Christmas, not Santa. Your story was pretty well written but it would have been better if the research had been more through. I hate to see Santa take all the blame for what you and I have helped do.
Jack Mann
- *****
Losing Touch
By Jennifer Hansen
This poem is sad, but I like it. It's from the heart.
Joddie
- *****
An Eternal Friend By Jennifer Hansen
Very nice and comes from the author's heart
Mona Thibodeaux
- *****
A Friend For Life By Jennifer Hansen
all I can say is I printed it to send to a friend....
Mona Thibodeaux
- *****
My Angel
I really like this poem. I've felt that way before too, only I didn't see an angel. The ending is positive & upbeat.
Rose
- *****
At The End Of The Century By Alice Bateman
It was a very well written story . I like the way Alice put it together.
Shanna Tobar
- ****
Christmas by Leisha Arnts
I liked your poem! I would have given it a 5, but I didn't feel like you got across to the readers everything you wanted to say. I think you picked a very good subject to write on. Lots of people don't know the true meaning of Christmas, and you are sharing the good true meaning that beats all the Christmas presents in the world!
Adam Buchko
- *****
Breaking Up by Amanda Clark
I think this is a very intresting poem Amanda. My friend just broke up with someone, and they have been going out since 1st grade. THis tellls a lot about a teenagers life.
Shanna Tobar
- *****
Why by Lizbeth Downhour
It was very good how other kid s look upon each other.
Shanna Tobar
- *****
Foreverby Tyler Bateman
Well done, Jeff, good rhyming scheme, good rhythme.
Alice in Worldland
- *****
Forever By
The images are solid and the tone shows love. Simply awesome
Carrie B.
- *****
The Joys Of Living In A Trailer By Charilette Rai Sweeney
Very good! You had a much better use of adjectives than I did. LOL
Jack Mann
- *****
Illusions
by Brynne Ferguson
Although not knowing whether this was written from real life or not, this could be the story of countless people, trying to get through the holidays after having lost a loved one.
Raye McDonald
- *****
The Coming Collision
By Stu Engle
The author states things in a way that are clear and concise. I don't agree with everything he says but his opinions are always thought provoking.
Jerry Lewellen
- ****
The Coming Collision By Stu Engle
I fear it is inevitable also. I just am hoping my fears are just that, fears.
Derek Bracer
- *****
The Coming Collision By Stu Engle
You make some great points - things that I have thought
about too. Our technology can be so wonderful, but also hurtful and scary
too. I wonder how far we will be allowed to go with all of it?
My only salvation is my relationship to God Almighty, who provided us the
minds to probe the unknowns. It becomes our responsibility to use these
great gifts for the good of mankind and not for evil. And sometimes the
line between good and evil is very thin. I enjoy reading your work. It is always thoughtful and
deep.
Raye McDonald
- *****
Maybe By Megan Estey
There is not maybe about it. This is one of the best poems I've read describing the contrast about having a date or not. Good going.
Elena
- *****
The Cellar By R.L. Walker
I thoroughly enjoy R. l. Walker's poetry. Childhood experiences are captured so vividly ... from the activities of fun to those feelings of fear. At some point, didn't we all fear the "booger man." This poem is wonderful.
Anonymous
- ****
The Opposite Of Hopeless By Janelle Zimmerman
The title of this story well confused me til I read the whole story. Your heart will leap out for the main character but by the end you will grin or be total confused. I give this short story, if I had one, an award for sure creaive genius.
Jessica Sayer
- *****
My Angel By Jennifer Hansen
This is a very good and well written poem. There is a lot of feeling in this poem.
Shirley Griffith
- *****
Losing TouchBy Jennifer Hansen
This is an intriguing poem because there are elements that are familar, yet there is a mystery as to what happened.
Rose
- *****
Love Dies By Jennifer Hansen
I can totally relate to this poem. The author did a great job of expressing those feelings that are characteristic to failing love.
Rose
- *****
Love Gone By Jennifer Hansen
This is my favorite poem by the author. I love the imagery & feel of the piece.
Rose
- *****
A Loathed Enemy By Beth Adair
Excellent show of emotion, excellently draws in the reader to the story.
Nils L
- *****
Maybe By Megan Estey
Very Good! Brings back old memories of my own teenage years, the 50's. Well written.
Jack Mann
- *****
What If It Were Roses By Alice Bateman
This is cute. It is a very sweet poem about saving nature...
Cindy Piazza-Ivy
- *****
Leaving Despair By Cindy Piazza-Ivy
There is a real sense of hope from this poem that I like. I believe it portrays a hopelessness that is real, but the author has not given up on love just because of a bad experience. A really good poem- I really like it.
Leland A.
- *****
Whiles Off In The Land Called Whimsicle By Emily Janiak
Another winner. I love how Ms. Janiak is able to put a story within a poem. This one is particularly touching.
Leland A.
- *****
My Angel By Jennifer Hansen
i think jennifer has a strong sense of what is her needs by this poem
Libby
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