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Cassie Hanaway
Critique Page Editor
Reviews For Apr. 1- Apr. 9
CRITIQUE OF THE WEEK
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name = Tony Newton
Narrative_author = My So-Called Life by Susan Hubenthal
Points = 5 points
opinion of the narrative and author = I am "new" to writing. Writing to me is just a way to express feelings onto paper. Susan does this with excellance! I felt her pain as I read her story. I too have lost a loved one, my brother. But I can't even "Fathom" the thought of losing my precious daughter. I'm so sorry for her loss and can only say she expressed it well. God Bless
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name = Krystal Bateman
Submission_author = The Cellar by R.L. Walker
Points = 5 points
opinion of the poem and author = very well done, and nice background, but what happened tp your dad.......????
name = Jim Ciccolini
Poem_author = The Renewal of Spring by Alice Bateman
Points = 5 points
opinion of the submission and author = I am ever impressed when a piece of writing touches my numbed soul. This poem conjures soft mental images of a better place and a better time... keep writing, Alice!
name = Jerry Lewellen
Poem_author = My Uncle Lee by Charlie Mann
Points = 3 points
opinion of the poem and author = A truly sympathetic look at a loved family member- well done. A few spelling errors detract from the final effect.
April
Poem_author = My Uncle Lee by Charlie Mann
Points = 5 points
opinion of the poem and author = This poem was very touching to me
Oh Stu,
That is so nice. Thankyou, for sending me the post. It really makes
the effort worthwhile to know it touched someone, enough, for them to take
the time to write. Susan
name = Julia Weldon
Poem_author = My Uncle Lee by Charlie Mann
Points = 5 points
opinion of the poem and author = This was a beautifully written poem about an obviously wonderful man. I felt sadness as well as happiness while reading it and I think that the author showed much heart and feeling.
name = Kristin
Submission_author = Trust by Jessica Cordova
Points = 4 points
opinion of the submission and author = It was nice,but it was kind of confusing.
name = Mrs. Platt
Submission_author = The Box by Tony Adams
Points = 4 points
opinion of the submission and author = Tony, your poem made me laugh becasue it is simple and everyday-like. Who is your English teacher?
name = Kari Fellows
Poem_author = I Need Myself
by Alice Bateman
Points = 5 points
opinion of the submission and author = I liked it. If people need to find theirself and have no sel esteem I would recommened this poem.
name = Jenifer Hulsizer
Submission_author = Sweet Lies by Jessica Cordova
Points = 5 points
opinion of the submission and author = I think your story is really good. I also think you should write another one something like that.
name = Kimberly
Story_author = I Met An Angel...by Jamie Kay
Points = 5 points
opinion of the story and author = It shows how family can live different lives
name = Sarah Branigan
Poem_author = I Need Myself
by Alice Bateman
Points = 5 points
opinion of the submission and author = This was a very intresting topic for this person towrite about.You can put many situations into this one poem. It was pretty nifty!
name = Derek Bracer
Poem_author = Look Away by Angela Bridges
Points = 5 points
opinion of the poem and author = A magnificent poem- it might be a little tough on over-protective parents but we have all been there. And I, as a parent, know it is very difficult to let go. An inciteful work
name = Krystal Bateman
Submission_author = Why Can't We Just Get Along by Jack Mann
Points = 5 points
opinion of the poem and author = It speaks so much of the truth, i don't know how to feel about it couse it touched me in a place were i've never been touched, keep up the good work, and hopfully the world will get better one day.
name = Gary Gordon
Submission_author = Mole Exterminator by Ken Bushnell
Points = 4 points
opinion of the submission and author = Always a pleasure, mister. Anyone who's drank their weight in alchohol (hand raised) has opened the curtains the next day and felt like a sick, half-blind, mole. Poor little guys... let's hope they get a little pleasure out of the tobacci.
name = Summer
Submission_author = Shrouded In Black by Derek Irick
Points = 5 points
opinion of the submission and author = The author had a very good theme of the story going with knowing that yourself is the one and only person that can hold you back from anything. It was all around a great poem and a triumph by the author.
name = Alexandra Carres
Poem_author = Cruelness of Death by Andree Halim
Points = 5 points
opinion of the poem and author = The author relay his feelings to his poem really well. I could feel the pain that he is feeling from the lost of his loved ones. People could never know when they are going to die or when their loved ones are going to die. That's why we have to make the best of what we have every minute, every hour, every day.
Column_author = Black Men White Women Natural of Fatal Attraction by Kawamba
Points = 5 points
opinion of the column and author = Insightful writing about a delicate subject. You are right - everyone has a different opinion of this, but so do they about homosexuals -attraction can't be that easily explained at least in my mind. Is it merely sexual or something more?
This just reinforces that nothing about people is simple, at least to my mind.
Keep writing.
Raye McDonald
name = Ken Bushnell
Story_author = Zone Three by Brian Willmott
Points = 4 points
opinion of the story and author = Excellent story. Thorough. All the details thought out and fit together. I enjoyed it very much. Seemed a bit choppy, though, like you weren't letting yourself go and not quite hitting your stride - which is, I imagine, hard to do with such a long piece. It looks like you have the enduarance for it. I thought I saw a rare talent to develop subtle meanings, nuances, or whatever they call it where the actions seem to say things the words don't.
name = Ken Bushnell
Story_author = A Time To Love, A Time To Die by Bruce Longman
Points = 5 points
opinion of the story and author = Some amazing and well crafted observations about the human character ("Stunned by the rapidity of the entire episode"). I also marvel at your ability to convey things so succinctly ("... the German equivalent to John Smith" paragraph for example). And Bruce, I always appreciate the challenge of having to pull out my dictionary on just one or two words in each of your stories.
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